matt hyland On Saturday, 6 February 2010

this is a new concept story, though shorter and simpler it uses more shots than the other...


The mermaid on the beach

Mermaid and the fish

the main problem in these stories is trying to fit the umbrella these are some concepts and changes i have changed with in the stories

^scene 5-6 Mermaid and the fish concept^

5 Comment

  1. tutorphil says:

    Hi Matt,

    Okay - I'm going to throw a conceptual hand grenade in your general direction... I don't think you're really thinking as creatively about your three components as you could be; in other words, you're not asking enough of the difficult questions; that said, you do have a difficult trio - but here are a few new ways into thinking new thoughts regarding your approach to crafting a satisfying story....

    1) What does a mermaid need with an umbrella? Well, why does anyone need an umbrella? To stay dry! But a mermaid is already wet, so why does she need an umbrella - for the same reason - to stay dry - but why would a mermaid need to stay dry? Answer - because she doesn't want to get wet? Question - why doesn't she want to get wet? Answer - because if she gets wet, something undesirable will happen - but what? Well, let's think about the folklore surrounding mermaids? According to 'The Little Mermaid' fairystory popularised by the Disney adaptation, the mermaid wants to walk on land as a human; and according to the Ron Howard 1984 movie Splash, if woman-who-was-once-a-mermaid gets wet, she gets her fishtail back...

    So, a mermaid might have a very obvious reason for always carrying an umbrella: she's a mermaid in disguise, and uses the umbrella to protect herself from transforming back into a fish! In this way, the mermaid and the umbrella become 'logical' and necessary to one another - as opposed to separate props; indeed, the umbrella starts to be a major plot-driver and not just a thing...

    So, for the sake of argument, let's say that your character is a former mermaid who needs to get to her umbrella before she gets too wet; so what's stopping her? What can create the tension... Is it a race against time - and how does it involve the elevator?

    Answers on a postcard please...

  2. Lev says:

    Just looking at the comment Phil made, I recomend you watch the film Splash I think it's called. It's about a mermaid who turns into a human and comesup onto land. However whenever she has a bath etc, her legs turn back into a tail.

    I know it's a wiki adress but it'll be a start

  3. Farideh says:

    hmmm I can see Phil's point here on how you should be ask more difficult questions maybe making a spider diagram of ways you could go with this or just in general peicing the story together. I think charlotte has a point you should watch Splash and research into mermaids a little more and I think your story will become more clear ^_^

  4. cool cool i like the comments and thanks phil, all the stuff ive put up are just concepts :)

  5. Alison says:

    From my part of the world we also used umbrellas to guard us from the sun (to keep from drying out ^_^) but Matt good work on getting your thoughts up on the blog, keep going with the ideas explorethe possibilities.

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